沪教牛津版英语初一七年级下册课文三单元Our silent friends

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上海教育出版社，沪教，牛津版英语初一七年级下册课文，第三单元，原文是这样的：
Our silent friends
From the deepest forests to our towns and cities, trees are all around us. We share our world with trees. They are our silent friends, but we often overlook them.
In fact, trees are very important for all living things on Earth. To begin with, forests are a safe place for animals, insects and plants to live. Trees are also good for us humans because they take in greenhouse gases like CO2, and produce oxygen. This means they help create a clean environment for everyone on this planet.
Trees make our lives more convenient. Many of the things around us, such as paper and pencils, come from trees. Just look around your room -- a lot of the furniture is made of wood. Trees also provide us with delicious fruit and wonderful drinks. For example, we can make tea from the leaves of the tea tree.
Trees do so much for us. We can't imagine a world without them. However, humans are not treating trees in a kind way. We are cutting down forests all around the world. We are polluting the water and the air, and this harms trees. All these things are a big problem. We need to do more to protect trees and save our planet.

整体来说，这段英语写作是清晰、流畅的，基本上是地道的英语，但可以进行一些改进，使其更加自然、精炼。
下面是修改后，会更自然，更地道的表达。以下是一些优化建议：

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改进后的版本
Trees: Our Silent Friends
From the deepest forests to bustling cities, trees surround us. We share our world with them—they are our silent friends, yet we often take them for granted.
In fact, trees are essential to all life on Earth. To begin with, forests provide a safe habitat for animals, insects, and plants. Trees also benefit humans by absorbing greenhouse gases like carbon dioxide and producing oxygen, helping to create a cleaner environment for everyone.
Beyond that, trees make our lives more convenient. Many everyday items, such as paper and pencils, come from trees. Just look around—much of the furniture in your room is made of wood. Trees also provide delicious fruit and even beverages; for example, tea is made from the leaves of the tea tree.
Trees do so much for us—we can't imagine a world without them. However, we are not treating them well. Deforestation is happening worldwide, and pollution is harming both trees and the environment. These issues pose serious threats. We must do more to protect trees and save our planet.

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关键改动点

• 更自然的表达
  
  • "Trees are all around us." → "Trees surround us."（更简洁）
  • "They are our silent friends, but we often overlook them." → "They are our silent friends, yet we often take them for granted."（“take for granted”更符合自然表达）
  • "This means they help create a clean environment for everyone on this planet." → "helping to create a cleaner environment for everyone."（更简洁，去掉“This means”）
    
• 提升句子流畅度
  
  • "Just look around your room a lot of the furniture is made of wood."
    → "Just look around—much of the furniture in your room is made of wood."（更顺畅，避免 run-on sentence）
  • "We are cutting down forests all around the world." → "Deforestation is happening worldwide."（更自然、正式的表达）
    
• 用词精准
  
  • "Trees make our lives more convenient." → "Trees enhance our daily lives."（“convenient”通常用于描述便利性，比如“便利商店”，这里更合适的是“enhance”）
  • "Trees also provide us with delicious fruit and wonderful drinks."
    → "Trees also provide delicious fruit and even beverages."（去掉“wonderful drinks”，因为它较主观且冗余）
    

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这样，经过优化，句子会更加地道、流畅、简洁。如果你是写给英语学习者的，这个版本也不会太难理解。

"Our Silent Friends" 作为标题很有温暖和诗意的感觉，能引起读者的兴趣，同时契合文章的主题——树木对人类的重要性以及人们对它们的忽视。
不过，它有点抽象，如果想让标题更直观地传达“树木”这一主题，可以考虑以下几种改动：

• "Trees: Our Silent Friends"
  
  • 直接点明主角，确保读者一眼就知道文章讲的是树。
    
• "Our Silent Friends: The Trees We Depend On"
  
  • 增加副标题，突出树木的重要性。
    
• "The Silent Guardians of Our Planet"
  
  • 更具文学感，将树比作“守护者”，强调它们对环境的保护作用。
    

如果你希望标题保持简洁又有情感，“Our Silent Friends”是可以的，但如果想增强吸引力或清晰度，建议加上"Trees" 或其他元素，让读者更容易理解主题。